fluffy ending...

[leonhart_17]

Thursdays they all eat dinner together. He doesn’t show up and she walks Ron outside the flat (they have to apparate from the back, too many eyes in the front.)

She walks back inside as there is a pounding on the front door. Opening the door reveals Harry, hands deep in his pockets.

“You’re late for dinner.” Dry humor makes it feel like it used to.

He seems surprised that everything is still so normal.

“Is everything okay with us?” His voice sounds like it did four nights before.

She smiles reassuringly. “Same as always.”

She can see his throat bob as he swallows.

“What if I don’t want it to be? What if I want more?”

She can see the truth in his eyes and she feels a jolt as her world realigns.

“I guess I’ll break my date.”

When she gets the floo later from Ron say that Harry and Ginny have broken up she doesn’t tell him that she already knows.

Comments

[happy-daze.livejournal.com]

I really liked the way you wrote this, interjecting those italicized parts all throughout. However, I think this fluffy ending was a bit too abrupt. I was a little bit confused with Harry's feelings (even though it is kind of obvious heh) but otherwise, I liked it! Thanks for sharing!

[leonhart-17.livejournal.com]

I felt it was abrupt too but I couldn't come up with anything to write that didn't go into Harry's POV which I was trying to avoid and keep the whole piece in Hermione's voice...

thanks so much for your comment! i really appreciate the imput!

[p-delusional.livejournal.com]

I liked that he's not okay with her date. I like the way you indicated Harry trying to figure out that he wants more. He probably slept scarcely in those four days:)

He deserves it:D

This piece is beautifully written and realistic. And I dig romance fics that are realistically written.

<3

[leonhart-17.livejournal.com]

aww thanks! i'm glad you liked it!